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Monday, 26 August 2013

EL Performance Task Poster by Kenneth Kiang (17), Darie Chan (12), Ng Wei Jie (22), Dawn Lim (2), Augustine Yap (7)


English Performance Task Template (Johanna Lim Ziyun, Axel Tan Jing Zhi, Donovan Neo Jia Jie, Kor Kin Peng Jeron and Shaun Tan Zhengxun)


EL Performance Task Template
(Group)

Class : S1-09

Roles

Name/ Index No.
Role
Job scope 
Johanna Lim Ziyun (3)
Leader, assistant- director

Controls the group and makes sure that they are on task, manages most of the tasks and ensures that filming is done at least two weeks before the deadline.
Axel Tan Jing Zhi (8)
Leader, Director

Remind the members to get the work done by the deadline, does regular checks on them to see whether they are on task.
Donovan Neo Jia Jie (13)
Editor and producer
Edit the poster so that it is detailed and persuasive.
Kor Kin Peng Jeron (18)
Researcher
To research on existing advertisements so as to get a better idea on how we should present the information.
Shaun Tan Zhengxun (23)
Idea generation 
Help us get better ideas on doing the poster



Techniques

  1. What are the advertising techniques that will be incorporated in this task? State at least two of them.
The techniques incorporated in this task will be:
-Bandwagon
-Testimonials

  1. Why have we chosen these?
We chose testimonials as we want to let SST students know that if they participate in the talent show, they may carve out a career for themselves, like how we did. We will then become rich and famous, earning a steady income. 

In regards to the other technique, we have chosen it as we want to exploit the desire of others to go to the ‘winning’ side. Most people want to win so if they see this, they would participate, hoping to get first place. The sign-ups would then go up the charts. 



Language Features

  1. What are the language features that will be incorporated in this task? State all of them.
Tagline, slogan, hyperbole, emotive words and declarative statements. 

2) Why have we chosen these?
We have chosen these as we want to exaggerate the effect if you join SST’s Got Talent. We need to make it as eye-catching and attention-grabbing as possible so that others may be interested to join the show. 

We have also included emotive words as it will be able to relate to the person (both physically and mentally). They would then be encouraged to join the talent show. 



Meeting schedule
13 August 2013
Attendance:
1) Johanna Lim Ziyun 
2) Axel Tan Jing Zhi 
3) Donovan Neo Jia Jie
4) Kor Kin Peng Jeron
5) Shaun Tan Zhengxun

We finished up the script and started doing up the poster and filmed some parts of it. We also decided the things needed and the way of persuading others to join the talent show!

22 August 2013
Attendance:
1) Johanna Lim Ziyun 
2) Axel Tan Jing Zhi 
3) Donovan Neo Jia Jie
4) Kor Kin Peng Jeron
5) Shaun Tan Zhengxun

We continued filming and finished up the poster and added a few things to the template. 



Reflection Questions (Johanna)

-What is the PACC of this task?
The purpose of this task is to promote and introduce SST’s Got Talent, the target audience is on SST students. The content of it will be that the people will be introducing the SST Talent Show, making it encouraging and persuasive for others to join. The context is in School of Science and Technology, the time will be from 0900 to 1300 on 15 September 2013. We will be introducing the talent show to others so that they may find it fun and may want to join. 

-How can I contribute to the group? What are my strengths?
I can contribute to the group as I have great leadership skills and I will be able to allow the people in the group to focus. I am also good with testimonials.

-How often can I meet to discuss with my group mates? 
I can meet them at least 3 times a week, except for Monday, I can only meet them until 3pm due to my CCA. 

-How can I ensure that every member’s idea is carefully considered prior to making a decision?
We will discuss all ideas and no one would be left behind, I will listen to all the ideas before making a decision so I will not be biased and ruin friendships. 



Reflection Questions (Donovan)
-What is the PACC of this task?
The purpose is to encourage SST students to join the SST’s got talent show. The audience are SST students. The content is an advertisement for SST’s talent show. The context is 3 people who saw a poster promoting SST’s got talent and wanting to participate in it. 
-How can I contribute to the group? What are my strengths?
I am good in editing, so I can edit the poster. 

-How often can I meet to discuss with my group mates? 
I am not free on Tuesdays and Wednesdays as I have floorball.

-How can I ensure that every member’s idea is carefully considered prior to making a decision?
We should meet up and discuss about it, then have a vote or something like that.


Reflection Questions (Axel)

-What is the PACC of this task?
Purpose - To encourage more students to take part in the SST Talent Showcase
Audience - SST Students
Content - Encouraging scenes that will make students want to take part in the SST Talent Showcase
Context - This is for SST Students of any level.

-How can I contribute to the group? What are my strengths?
I am good at playing the keyboard, so this can help the poster be more realistic. Also, I can help with making sure everyone stays on task. 

-How often can I meet to discuss with my group mates? 
I cannot discuss on Monday and Wednesday as I have CCA. 

-How can I ensure that every member’s idea is carefully considered prior to making a decision?
I take everyones ideas into consideration. I analyze the idea and put my vote on it. 

Reflection Questions (Jeron)

-What is the PACC of this task?
To encourage more students to take part in the SST Talent show.

-How can I contribute to the group? What are my strengths?
I can help to do research on what makes a good advertisements and the ways of making an advertisement.

-How often can I meet to discuss with my group mates? 
I can meet on Wednesday and Friday.

-How can I ensure that every member’s idea is carefully considered prior to making a decision?
I will consider everybody's opinions?

Reflection Questions (Shaun)

-What is the PACC of this task?
Purpose: Is to attract pupils to join the SST talent show
Audience: SST students
Content: stuff that present the talent show in a good light
Context: It takes place in SST on 21 December 2012 from 9am to 12 noon

-How can I contribute to the group? What are my strengths?
I can help take videos and act also.
My strengths are my acting and playing the drums! 

-How often can I meet to discuss with my group mates? 
Everyday accept Tuesday (tuition)

-How can I ensure that every member’s idea is carefully considered prior to making a decision?
I will clearly consider my friend’s opinions.

English Performance Task (SST's Got Talent)

Group members: Jia wei, Sean, Benjamin and Liying

VIDEO



EL Performance Task Template
(Group)


Class : S109


Roles






Techniques

1. What are the advertising techniques that will be incorporated in this task? State at least two of them.
  • Testimonial
  • Snob Appeal 2
2. Why have we chosen these?

More people can be influenced by their greed for fame/money. They will feel more inspired to join when they see a famous person joined it before. They would be lured when they hear the benefits of getting their talent noticed.

Language Features

1. What are the language features that will be incorporated in this task? State all of them.

  • Rhetorical Questions
  • Imperative
  • Hyperbole

2) Why have we chosen these?

We have chosen these as they can encourage the students to take part in the SST’s Talent Show, for example using hyperbole to add colour to the advertisement.



Meeting schedule






Reflection Questions (Individual)

  1. What is the PACC of this task?

  1. How can I contribute to the group? What are my strengths?

  1. How often can I meet to discuss with my groupmates? 

  1. How can I ensure that every member’s idea is carefully considered prior to making a decision?



Li Ying:

  1. P: To showcase the SST’s Talent Show and encouraging the students to join.
    A: SST Students
    C: Encouraging and enthusiastic
    C: Clips of a part of previous talent shows
2. I can help with leading the group and guide them along.
3. We meet up about once to twice a week.
4. Note down the suggestions each member says and discuss together.

Benjamin:

1. The purpose is to promote SST’s Talent show.
2. I can give ideas and help with the moviemaking as I’m quite good with digital stuff.
3. At least once a week.
4. By listening to everyone’s ideas before finalizing the idea.

Jia Wei:

1. P: Let people be aware of SST’s talent show and to inspire them to participate.
    A: SST Students 
    C: Formal, encouraging and enthusiastic.
    C: Clips from the previous SST’s got talents
2. iMovie video editing
3. Once a week
4. We can come together online or in person to hear each ones ideas.

Sean Lim:

1. The purpose of this task is to promote the SST talent show and encourage them to take part.
2. I know how to use iMovie so I can help in editing
3. Quite often as my CCAs are only on Monday and Thursday
4. Remind the leader to take note of everyone’s suggestions 


Thursday, 22 August 2013

Activities for Today's Lesson (23 August 2013)

Hi ladies and gentlemen,

1. Link for Activity Sheet:
https://sites.google.com/a/s2013.sst.edu.sg/english-language/s1-09

2. Analyzing Ad Slogans:

a. In your groups, discuss the qualities that make your assigned brand's slogan persuasive.
b. Select a representative to present the key points from your discussion.


3. Composing Ad Slogans:

a. Select a real-world item you would like to sell.
b. Download and save a photo of it from the internet.
c. Use any of the techniques listed on the whiteboard to come up with a persuasive slogan for your item.
d. Prepare a keynote presentation in the following format (1 slide for each item):

1. Group Name
2. Names of Members
3. Name and Picture of Item
4. Intended Use of Item
5. Slogan
6. Technique Used

7. Intended Audience and Effect of Slogan

Cheers,

Miss Esha

Thursday, 15 August 2013

Roles


Name/Index Number
Class
Role
Description of job scope
Dawn Lim (2)
S1-09
Researcher
Research about the language use and advertisements techniques
Augustine Yap (7)
S1-09
Text Writer/Editor
Type the text and edit it
Darie Chan Rong Zhi (12)
S1-09
Image Editor
In charge of images that will be used
Kiang Jia Ming Kenneth (17)

S1-09
Leader/Chief Editor
Creation and editing of poster
Ng Wei Jie (22)
S1-09
Image Researcher
Find pictures suitable for usage and pass it to Image Editor

Monday, 12 August 2013

Roles for English Performance Task


Performance Task

Dear ladies and gentlemen,

I am on leave today. Please get into your groups and discuss the performance task. There is a new version of the task uploaded on your google site So, do refer to that.

Cheers,

Miss Esha

Tuesday, 6 August 2013

English Performance Task Roles /(o3o)/


Roles for English Performance Task

Name/Index Number
Class
Roles
Description of job scope
Johanna Lim Ziyun (3)
S1-09
Leader, assistant-director
Controls the group and makes sure that  they are on task, manages most of the tasks and ensures that filming is done at least two weeks before the deadline.
Axel Tan Jing Zhi (8)
S1-09
Leader, Director
Remind the members to get the work done by the deadline, does regular checks on them to see whether they are on task. 
Donovan Neo Jia Jie (13)
S1-09
Editor
Edit the video so that it is detailed and persuasive. 
Kor Kin Peng Jeron (18)
S1-09
Researcher
To research on existing advertisements so as to get a better idea on how we should present the information. 
Shaun Tan Zhengxun (23)
S1-09
Video-grapher
Films all the shots of us during the up coming weeks in order for them to be in the video. (includes good resolution and audible voices)

Monday, 5 August 2013

Roles of group mates in the EL PT



Name/Index Number
Class
Roles
Description of job
Lok Yang Teng(20)
S1-09
Cameraman
In charge of videos
Crane Lim Yu Xuan(5)
S1-09
Leader
in charge of the group
Javier Tay Yu Cheng(15)
S1-09
Researcher
in charge of research
Chong Yong Liang(10)
S1-09
Editor
Video maker

Wednesday, 24 July 2013

Work for Today's Lesson (July 24)

Hi ladies and gentlemen,

Please do the following preparatory work for informal letter writing in today's lesson:

1. Visit the following link:
https://sites.google.com/a/s2013.sst.edu.sg/english-language/s1-09

2. Download and go through the Situational Writing Slides - Common Rhetorical Strategies.ppt file.

3. Download Informal Letter Task with Question Analysis Template.doc and complete the planning template section. DO NOT write the letter yet.

Cheers,

Miss Esha

Monday, 22 July 2013

Informal Persuasion (Crane, Javier & Benjamin)


  1. There was a time when I wanted an iPhone so I had to persuade my mother to get me one.
  2. I made a deal with her that if I get to the best class in the school she would get me an iPhone.(Deal/Promise)
  3. A few weeks after I had received the results that told me I can go to the best class, my father got me an iPhone.

Informal Persuasion (Johanna, Yang Teng and Li Ying)

1) Recalling incidents where you had to persuade your parents to buy or give you something.
Johanna:
1) Persuading my parents to buy me the Ben-10 Ommitrix watch
2) Persuading my parents to buy me the ultimate and coolest sports shoe.
3) Persuading them to buy me Pokemon figurines, cards, house and the games.

Li Ying:
1) Persuading her parents to give her more pocket money.
2) Persuading parents to buy her an iPod

Yang Teng:
1) None

2) The kind of tactics or strategies you used for the persuasion
Johanna:
Tactic for 1) Crying, throwing tantrums. (Emotional Appeal)
Tactic for 2) Elaborating on how good the sports shoe are and how they would benefit me. I also tried telling them that I would wear it all the time and it would be a good investment. I would also do better in my studies and NAPFA. (Deal)
Tactic for 3) Asking them for it, telling them how awesome Pokemon is and how it would help me in life. I would also have recreation time too, since I have no siblings, I could play it on my own and it would burn some time. (Benefits, how it would help me etc)

Li Ying:
Tactic for 1 and 2, throwing tantrums (Emotional appeal), and constantly saying "Please!"(Threat) She will not stop until she gets what she wants.

Yang Teng:
1) None

3) How long did it take for your parents to give in?
Johanna:
Time for 1) 15 minutes
Time for 2) 1 hour
Time for 3) 2 years

Li Ying:
Time for 1) 1 month
Time for 2) 2 days

Yang Teng:
Time: None

informal persuasion (yong liang and shiqiang)

1. recall those incidents token you had to persuade your parents to buy/give you something?

  
I wanted a transformer toy which costs $50 , but they told me too wait until there is a sale then buy then can get 20 % discount , but I was too impatient to wait for 4 months. Thus I decided I will convince them to buy it for me , by hook or by crook.

2. The kinds of tactics or strategies you used for the persuasion?


So , I started doing something to irritate them , by sitting on his shoulder and started shaking his head around and saying :" I want that toy , buy for me !" over and over again.Eventually , he got so irritated that he slapped me and we left the shopping mall .
The next day , I woke up and started pestering my father to buy it for me .Desperate to get his beauty sleep , he promised to buy it for me .

3. How long it took your parents to give in?


This method only took 2 days .

Informal Persuasion (Sean Lim, Donovan and Augustine)

Question
1. Recall those incidents when you had to persuade your parents to buy/give you something.
2. The kind of tactics/strategies you used for the persuasion.
3. How long it took your parents to give in.

Answer
1) The time when I had to persuade my parents to buy me an iPhone.

2) Whining, comparing yourself with others who have something you want and promise them to do well in studies if they get you the phone.
Emotional - Your parents love you, so they should buy the phone for you thinking that they want to get the best type of phone for you.
Threat - Threaten them if they do not want to buy the phone for you. Not recommended as it is rude and unhealthy for parent-child relationships.
Promise - Convince your parents that you are willing to put in effort to study if they put in a little more money for you.
Deal - Roughly the same as promise, having a deal with your parents, exchange of conditions.
3) 20 minutes.

Informal Persuasion (Jeron, Kenneth Mah, Nikisha) :3

Jeron: (Deal)
1. Persuaded my parents to grill a beef steak
2. Striking a deal
3. 10 seconds

Kenneth: (Emotional)
1. Persuading my parents to buy me a new computer
2. Persistent nagging
3. 5 years and counting

Nikisha: (Emotional)
1. I persuaded my mother to buy me a cat
2. I pestered my mother and followed her around saying 'please' repeatedly
3. 1 day

Informal Persuasion (Darie, Daris and Dawn)

1. Incident: 
 = Darie - I persuaded my parents that I wanted to stay at home when they wanted to go out.

 = Dawn - When I was young, I used to love chocolate milk, so when my mom or anyone else gave me normal milk, I had to "persuade" them to make me chocolate milk instead.


2. Tactics/Strategies:
 = Darie - Whining, using words like "please", pestering them, irritating them (Emotional appeal; threat)

 = Dawn - Cry until I get my way (it can go for hours, literally) (Emotional appeal)


3. Time:
 = Darie - 7 minutes 

 = Dawn - 5 minutes - 5 hours (depending on parents mood)

Informal Persuasion! ( Axel, Ray, Shaun) :DDDD

Incidents of Persuasion:

Axel:

Wanted a Xbox 360, parents were like NOPE.


Ray:

Wanted a Lego Set, parents said, "Do you really need it?"

Shaun:

Wanted a toy, but Mom said NOPE.

Tactics and Strategy:

Axel:

Repeating the phrase "PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE" over and over and over again.
( Others - Annoyance )

Ray:

Bargained. Good behaviour and doing chores for a month for Lego Set.
( Deal )

Shaun:

Threw a tantrum* and pooped his pants.
( Emotional Appeal )

Time taken:

Axel:

Within an hour.

Ray:

LONG TERM PROCESS of ONE MONTH.

Shaun:

In half an hour.

Informal Persuasion by Kenneth Kiang, Ho Jia Wei and Ng Wei Jie

Informal Persuasion

Questions:

1) Recall those incidents when you had to persuade your parents to buy/give you something.

*2) The kind of tactics/strategies you used for the persuasion.

3) How long it took your parents to give in.


Scenarios

Kenneth Kiang
1) I persuaded my father to buy a new home laptop this year.

2) I said that our current laptop is too old and is extremely slow now. It intermittently crashes and it takes a long time to load. The new laptop, Samsung Series 7 Chronos, has 8GB RAM instead of our current one which was 4GB, with smoother keyboards that allowed me to type faster. It is also bigger, has better display quality and it’s running on Windows 8 while the current one was Windows 7. It has more USB ports and 2 other SS USB port, which will allow extremely fast transfer of data. It had 750GB worth of space instead of the current one which was less than 500GB, and it was also “dying” since most of the space was taken up and it only had around 30GB left. There was also an IT show at the Expo which was selling this model at a price of $1800 (Usual Price: $1900), which actually costed lesser than the current laptop which was the computer’s selling price of $2000.

3) It took a week for my father to think about it. He eventually gave in because of all the benefits that we would receive.



Ho Jia Wei
1) I begged my mother to buy an application in the apple application store 4 years ago.

2) I bribed my mother by saying that I will study more and game less and that if she could buy books for $10, why couldn’t she pay for a game which is 10 times cheaper.

3) It took my mother 2 days to finally agree to it.



Ng Wei Jie
1) I think I asked my parents to buy a packet of chocolate, as I wanted to get sugar rush. (Yeah...)

2) My parents didn’t allow me to buy anymore as I still have about 8 packets of Kit Kat at home, but I wanted to have another taste, so I just threw it into the basket without them knowing. I kept a poker face as my parents were paying for the chocolate, and when we got into the car, I secretly ate the chocolate. (:D)

3) They didn’t know.   (:P)



Types of persuasion

Emotional Appeal: -

Threat: -

Promise: Ho Jia Wei

Deal: Ho Jia Wei

Others:
Secretly Done: Ng Wei Jie
Profitable: Kenneth Kiang

Friday, 19 July 2013

Scenarios for Informal Email - Benjamin, Javier & Crane

Scenarios
Scenario 1: To persuade my brother to give me a loan as I am in debt
Scenario 2: To persuade my mother not to force to me to go for extra tuition
Scenario 3: To persuade my sister to come back during her break from her school overseas

PAC analysis
1) Explanation of scenario: My mother just brought me to a new tuition center and wants me to go for tuition there, when I already  have tuition every single day except for Saturday. I want to persuade her to not force me to go for extra tuition but I do not dare to tell her in person so I am sending her an email.
2) Purpose: Persuade my mother from adding more tuition classes to my schedule
3) Audience: My mother
4) Context: I am trying to tell my mother to stop giving me more tuition
5) Tone & Register: The tone of can be angry and annoyed. The register is Informal


Scenarios for Informal Email (Darie, Dawn and Daris) "3D"

Scenario: Persuade your relative living in another country, to come visit me

PAC Analysis
1. Explanation = I feel very lonely, and I miss my relative as I have not met them in a long time
2. Purpose = To persuade my relative to come to singapore for a few weeks to visit me and my family 
3. Audience = My relative in other country
4. Context = Telling my relatives to visit me as I had not seen him in a long time.
5. Tone and register = Convincing and persuasive informal

Scenarios for Informal Mail (Nikisha, Kenneth Mah, Jeron)

PART 1)

1) Explain Scenario: Your aunt is a great cook, you want to visit her for the weekend to have her cook for you. However, she doesn't like using handphones. So you decide to email your aunt to have her cook you POTATOES.

2) Purpose: To have your aunt cook you potatoes which in turn you will eat.

3) Audience: Aunt.

4) Context: Aunt's house, Saturday.

5) Tone & Register: Persuasive, personal. Informal Register.

EL Blog Scenarios for Informal Email :D (With Axel, Ray and Shaun!)

1. Explain Scenario:

Inviting relatives over for *Mom's surprise birthday celebration.

(*We are adults.)

2. Purpose:

To contact relatives to invite them to birthday party.

3. Audience:

Our relatives. 

4. Context:

The previous year, we didn't really plan a proper celebration, we just gave *Mom a cake. This year, we want to give her a surprise

5. Tone and Register:

Casual tone, Informal register.